Narrative writing revision

Frozen
​Elsa's perspective
​I'm Elsa, a princess , and I have a sister named Anna.I have the magic to control the ice and snow.My sister and I always play with it secretly.However, during a play with my sister, I accidentally hurt her with magic.I hit her on the head and made her unconscious. My parents took us to ask the trolls for help. They erased Anna's memory of my magic. From then on, I began to alienate Anna to protect her.
​As I grew up, my magic became more and more uncontrollable.I must always wear gloves to prevent the magic from getting out of control.In order to find a way to help me, my parents went to sea for a long trip, but they died because of a windstorm. After that, the castle was completely closed and no longer open.
​Three years later, my coronation day arrived and the castle reopened. People came to watch the ceremony, both civilians and nobles from other countries.However, after the coronation, Anna told me that she was going to marry a man named Hans she just met.In the quarrel, Anna tore off one of my gloves, and I used dangerous magic uncontrollably.Everyone found out my secret and they were afraid of me.I was so scared that I fled to a mountain.
​Here, I got freedom and relaxation , and sang my inner voice out loud.I used magic to create my own ice castle.
​Soon after, Anna found me with Kristoff and reindeer Sven who she met on the trip. She told me that the kingdom had been covered with out-of-control ice and snow, and she wanted me to go back to remove them. But,I was still afraid. In the quarrel, I accidentally hurt Anna again. This time, I hit her heart.
​After Anna left, Hans took me away with the army and imprisoned me in the castle. But when I saw the tragic scene outside, I thought I had to leave, so maybe the snow would stop. So, I used magic to escape.
​When I found Hans,he lied to me that Anna had been frozen because of my attack. I was heartbroken, and he wanted to sneak up on me. At this moment, Anna ran to my side, helped me stop the sneak attack, but she turned into an ice sculpture completely.
​I hold Anna in pain. Suddenly, because the magic of love, Anna recovered.I see, love can eliminate ice and snow! I restored the kingdom to spring, and Hans was driven away. People were no longer afraid of me, and Anna had found someone who really loves her. Everything was finally getting better.