英语 - 读后续写
读后续写
编情节
- 确定句
1.1 / 2.1：就地取材，衔接给定的那一句。
1.-1：就地取材，根据第二段首句，反向推导。
2.-1：升华，体现文章所想表达的道理，套用背的模版句。
2.-2：给故事搭配一个合适的结局。注意此处的「合适」应该合情合理，需要有积极的一面但不能过于离谱。
- 其他句
刻画情绪、表情、肢体动作，套用背的模版句。
结合其他人物，产生互动，可以通过动作、语言、眼神等，套用背的模版句。
不让主角赢的太顺利，制造一些意外、困难。可以在第一段虐，也可以在第二段靠前部分小虐一下。
环境描写、场景，背的优美句子之类的。
美化句子
以“他低下了头”为例。
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 在一个动作之后，可以再接一个动作，作为上一个动作的延续，与上一个动作传递相同的情感。
He ducked (\(v.\) 低头或弯身以免背看见) his head and stared at his own shoes.
He lowered his head and couldn't help sobbing.
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 可以让身体部位 / 情绪名词作主语。
His head drooped (\(v.\) 因为疲惫或沮丧而耷拉下脑袋眼睛).
His eyes avoided mine.
Sadness flashed across his face. / A look of sadness crossed his face.
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 在想表达态度、观点的时候，很适合用 it 做形式主语。
It was apparent that he tried to avoid eye contact with me.
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 强调句，也可以突出重点信息。
It was l who broke the silence first. "David, I think it's not reasonable to quit right now..."
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 表方位的介词短语或副词放句首。
In front of me was his drooping head.
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 副词 / 介词短语 / 非谓语 / 形容词 作状语。通过 where / when / why / how / 无敌的 with 来表现。
where：In front of me was his drooping head.
why：He ducked his head to avoid eye contact with me.
how：He lowered his head in low spirits.
形容词：Depressed and helpless, David lowered his head.
with：David lowered his head with his eyes fixed on the floor.
with：With his head buried, I could tell that he was sad / frustrated.
with：With head down (\(adv.\)) and shoulders trembling, he was trying hard to hide his disappointment.
副词：He just ducked his head and stared at his own shoes.
副词：His eyes deliberately (\(adv.\) 故意地 \(\approx\) on purpose) avoided mine.
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 综合
长难句
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 把一个动作细化，拆成好多个分动作。
The boy rushed to the lake, took off his clothes and jumped into the water.
Having taken off his clothes, the boy rushed to the lake and jumped into the water.
After casting a glance at the audience, the singer took a deep breath and began to sing.
Sitting on the subway, the old man stared at his phone, knitting his brows.
Absorbed in reading, the man sat still on the subway, frowning.
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 多个动作联系
句式：
[i.] 三个流畅的动作 Sb. did A, did B and did C.
[ii.] 三个同时发生的动作（A 为重点突出的动作）Sb. did A, doing B and doing C. / Doing B and C, sb. did A.
[iii.] 有先后、因果 Having done A, sb. did B and C. / Sb. did A and B, doing C. / After / Before doing A, sb. did B to do C (目的).
例子（达拉崩吧）：
[i.] I climbed over the highest mountain, found my way into the deep forest and brought back the princess.
[ii.] Carrying the best sword, I went into the deep forest and brought the princess back.
[iii.] I climbed over the highest mountain and found my way into the dense forest, bringing back the princess.
[iii.] After climbing over the highest mountain, I found my way into the dense forest to bring back the princess.
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 状语 #1：加情感，作伴随 / 原因 / 结果状语
积极：excited / thrilled、joyful / overjoyed、amazed、delighted、satisfied
消极：sacred、worried、ashamed、nervous、depressed
Depressed and helpless, the princess cried out.
He finally found his way into the forest, exhausted but excited.
He brought back the princess, feeling proud and excited.
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 状语 #2：加工具，通过 with
句式：with sth. in one's hand、with sth. on one's head、with the help of sb.、with a smile on his / her face
He climbed over the hill with a sword in his hand.
He, with the help of an elf, saved the princess.
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 状语 #3：加过渡
表情绪：To one's surprise / delight / relief、Hopefully, / Obviously, / Of course,
表时间、用时：
马上：in no time、immediately
那一刻：at that moment / time、when / while / as
早 / 中 / 晚：early in the morning、in the late afternoon、the next / following morning
表先后：
然后：(and) then、after that
不久：after a while、soon afterwards、shortly after、before long
最终：at last、in the end、finally、eventually
\(\color{#66CCFF} \bullet\) 添加状语的最终成果（依旧达拉崩吧）：
句式：时间 / 地点 / 过渡, sb., with sth. in one's hand, doing B, did A, doing C, feeling / looking ...
To our surprise, he, with the help of an elf, saved our princess, feeling proud and excited.
Carrying the best sword, he eventually found his way into the dense forest, exhausted but excited.
Before long, he, with the best sword in his hand, saved our princess, finding their way through the woods.
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