Amazing

Tian, I admire the amazing speed that you put words into action. This is going to be an awesome chapter!

So I just finished applying to a Sales position at Manulife Financial, one of Canada's largest insurance company that provides financial services to clients. I applied for Manulife's investment division back in September, but did not hear back from them. Before, I had never considered a sales position, but your kind and insightful words yesterday had opened up my mind.

As a new graduate, I should be accepting of all opportunities. This sales position can teach me about many financial products that are offered within the insurance industry. They seem to have a thorough sales training program. I am excited by the mere thought of this program. An opportunity to obtain skills in a wholy new area, something that I know is lacking in my personality-- communication skills, building business relationships.

So that's my job-related news for today!

Tian, you have an awesome vocabulary base, but as my high school English teacher always said to me: you should always use the simplest sentence structure and vocabulary to express yourself. What she means is that there are two stages to writing. 1. Clarity of writing; 2. Style of writing. We should focus on #1 for now.

Your passage, as corrected:

"Hope this could be a more enjoyable and effective way to improve my English skills. Your (wonderful/creative... lalala~) idea has ignited my desire to be a diligent person who will fight against his laziness (muahaha) and come out of his predicament (ohYAY). Soon, the best days will lie ahead both of us!"

I just found out today. We are going to have a party in our biggest library today. O.O They are going to transform study area into dancefloors and lounges (有沙发，可以喝酒聊天的地方). Haha. So want to go and take pictures!