Narrative writing revision

Hello.This is the story of a girl called Alice.Our story begins on a summer's day .Let’s meet Alice:here she is,she is sitting next to the river with her sister on a very hot summer’s afternoon.Her sister is reading a book,and with no one to talk to.Alice is bored...and a bit sleepy.Soon,she’ll be in a Wonderland full of strange and wonderful adventures...but Alice doesn’t know that yet...
Alice:Oh...There is nothing to do...except lie on the grass and pick daisies.Shall I make a daisy chain for my dear little Dinah?Oh...I don’t know...it’s so hot...
Rabbit :Oh dear!Oh dear!I am late!I am so very late!Oh dear!Oh dear！
A white Rabbit! A talking white rabbit?Perhaps.But a rabbit with a pocket-watch?A rabbit with pockets?I must see where he is going?Alice had never seen a rabbit with a pocket,or a waistcoat,or a pocket-watch before.So she ran after the rabbit as fast as she could,and in front of the white rabbit is a rabbit hole ,Alice jumped straight after him.
Ohhhhhh...Either this hole is very deep or I’m falling very slowly.And what a curious rabbit hole!Who would think a rabbit-hole would have book-shelves..and books...and maps...and jars of marmalade?Alice falls down,down,down.She falls for so long that she began to think about Dinah,her cat.Dinah will miss me tonight.I hope they will remember her milk at tea time.Dinah my dear,I wish you were down here with me!Alice is beginning to feel quite sleepy when suddenly,her fall was over and she finds herself sitting on a pile of leaves and grass.
Rabbit:Ouch!who is there?Oh,mt ears and whiskers!Oh,how late it’s getting!
Alice：Wait!Please sir!wait a moment!
The White Rabbit runs down a long tunnel.Alice runs after him.But when she reaches the end of the tunnel, she finds only a long hall with doors all the way round.Alice tries to open the doors, but they are all locked.Then she sees a table with a tiny key on it.These doors are all too big.There must be a smaller door somewhere.
I wonder... hmmm,let me take a look behind this little curtain...ohh!A tiny little door!Let me try the key...What a beautiful garden! But how can I visit it?The door is so tiny .I can’t even fit my head through!Oh!It’s no use.I wish I could fold up like a telescope!
Wait a minute...What’s this?It certainly wasn’t here before.A bottle I wonder what it is.Let me see the label.Hmmm:Drink me...
What a curious feeling! I am folding up like a telescope!And so she is!Alice gets smaller and smaller until she is small enough to fit through the door.But she’d forgotten something...The key!Alice is too small to reach the table.She tries to clime up the table leg but it is too slippery......