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As the long May Day holiday was drawing to a close, I found myself cherishing the unforgettable memories I had created with my friend.

In anticipation of the upcoming May Day celebrations, we had made plans to spend the day together. That morning, my roommate kindly helped me with my makeup. Afterwards, we met up at a restaurant, filled with excitement. Our first stop was a large market, a haven for anime enthusiasts, filled with a dazzling array of anime merchandise. We wandered from shop to shop, and my heart overflowed with joy. It was a true paradise for an anime lover, and the presence of stunning and handsome cosplayers added to the vibrant atmosphere.

Next, we decided on a hot pot restaurant. We ordered a variety of delicious dishes, although I have to admit, the prices were a bit steep. As we ate the yummy, aromatic food, we chatted about the differences between our hometowns and shared interesting stories we had heard. The setting sun cast a warm glow on our faces as the fragrance of the hot pot filled the air.

Everything felt perfect.

Finally, we rode shared electric bikes back to our dormitory in the cool evening breeze. It was truly a memorable May Day celebration!

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1.开头:
原文：The long vacation of “May Day” was coming to an end. During this vacation, I had an unforgettable time with my friend.
修改后：As the long May Day holiday was drawing to a close, I found myself cherishing the unforgettable memories I had created with my friend.
2.计划:
原文：Before the May Day celebration was coming, we made an appointment to play together.
修改后：In anticipation of the upcoming May Day celebrations, we had made plans to spend the day together.
3.早晨:
原文：On the morning, I asked my roommate for help to put on makeup.
修改后：That morning, my roommate kindly helped me with my makeup.
4.商场:
原文：Then, we met excitedly at a restaurant and went to a big market where there were many Anime goods which were beautiful and various. We went into shops one by one. My heart was as sweet as honey. This is heaven for an anime lover. In this market, we could easily see beautiful and handsome cosplayers.
修改后：Afterwards, we met up at a restaurant, filled with excitement. Our first stop was a large market, a haven for anime enthusiasts, filled with a dazzling array of anime merchandise. We wandered from shop to shop, and my heart overflowed with joy. It was a true paradise for an anime lover, and the presence of stunning and handsome cosplayers added to the vibrant atmosphere.
5.火锅:
原文：Then, we chose a hot pot restaurant. We ordered a lot of delicious food. But to be honest, the price was a little high. While we were eating yummy and aromatic overflowing food, we chatted a lot. Such as the differences between our hometowns and some interesting stories that we had heard.
修改后：Next, we decided on a hot pot restaurant. We ordered a variety of delicious dishes, although I have to admit, the prices were a bit steep. As we ate the yummy, aromatic food, we chatted about the differences between our hometowns and shared interesting stories we had heard.
6.傍晚:
原文：The sun set in the west, and its afterglow brushed over our faces. The fragrance of hot pot floated in the air.
修改后：The setting sun cast a warm glow on our faces as the fragrance of the hot pot filled the air.
7.感受:
原文：Everything seemed so wonderful.
修改后：Everything felt perfect.
8.结尾:
原文：In the end, we rode shared electric bikes back to the dormitory in the evening breeze. What a great May Day celebration it was!
修改后：Finally, we rode shared electric bikes back to our dormitory in the cool evening breeze. It was truly a memorable May Day celebration!